Sunday, March 30, 2014
WALT: add detail to our writing to make it more interesting.
Have you included:
- description using at least 2 senses?
- correct punctuation?
- Different sentence beginnings
This just a piece of writing I am really proud.I have shared this writing at an important meeting at the Ministry of Education.
‘Woohoo!” I shouted as I sprinted down the beach, flicking the sand up behind me.I was so excited to get to the rope swing.It smelt like fish’n’chips.When I got to the rope swing I took a leap of faith it was fun but scary at the same time.The first time I swang I didn’t let go, the second time I nearly let go but didn’t, the third time I closed my eyes and let go.”Brrrrr” the water felt as cold as ice, I was shivering and shaking in the water.