add detail to our creative writing to make it interesting to our reader
- use of descriptive words to build a picture
- use different sentence beginnings and types
- use expressive vocabulary
- describe the event so the reader feels as though they are there
- be creative and imaginative
Monday, June 23, 2014
This week the whole class have been working on animation about a picture. Now first we had to write a story and then we used our stories as our topic.
My story is about a girl who see's a little door. Then there was cake floating mysteriously around she ate it. She shrunk. She climbed up the ladder and then she went in. There was a candy land. I really like how my movie matches my story. I think I could have worked maybe a bit longer on it.
Posted by Unknown at 11:40 AM
Friday, June 6, 2014
You are going to write a descriptive recount, telling our audience about a time you were successful.
Describe a time we were successful
Have you remembered…
- start with something that was said or thought
- Use punctuation (capital letters to start sentences and names and fullstops to end)
- to put everything in the right order
- use describing words and lots of detail.
- Re-read it to check it makes sense
Please don’t be first Please Please Please” I was saying in my head as were doing the Speech competition. It was really nerveracking when I was watching the other people. Oh and don’t get me started on how nervous I was when it was my turn! Then I was so relieved when my turn was finished. Next the winners got announced I was so proud of myself I came second.
First I sat and watched the people do their speeches. Man I was so nervous and proud of my friends at the same time. Everyone clapped after they had finished their speeches.
Suddenly they called my name, it was my turn. At that time my heart was pounding, my legs were shaking, time slowed down, I had zoned out, I tried to imagine everyone in their undies and bra, I took a big breath and said my speech.
“It was finally over” I said in my head. Everyone clapped and cheered I was so proud of myself, my friends and teacher were proud too. You know now I don’t really think it was that scary anymore.
When they announced the winners I was so proud of myself I was going to burst. I came second as I sat down. My friends were saying congratulations to me.
At the end of the day I felt so proud of myself. I was glad it was over but also would have loved to do it all over again.
Posted by Unknown at 11:03 AM